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A sample Pitch Sheet, followed by the author's original synopsis to show the difference.  Notice how much tighter the revised version is.
 
 
 
Genre:  Drama/Thriller/Romance
 
Time Period:  1990’s and Present Day
 
Locations: Various U.S. , primarily Connecticut and Washington
 
Budget: Medium
 
Target Market/Demographic Focus: Men and Women 18-25 and up
 
 
Logline:  A hunt for a serial killer reunites FBI agent Ian Hamlin with the love of his life. Now if only he can save her before she becomes the next victim…
 
 
The Story:
 
     Someone’s got a grudge against Sue Walker. Any Sue Walker it seems. Three murders in as many years – no clues, no connection – except the women’s name.
 
     FBI agent Ian Hamlin had been assigned to protect Sue #3 until budget cuts reassigned him. It’d been his first assignment since transferring back to Connecticut , his home state, after his ex left him broken hearted in Seattle . Some homecoming. Now Sue #3 is dead, the serial killer unstopped and Ian is determined no more Sue Walkers will die on his watch.
    
     He and his partner set out to warn potential targets in the area. At the first Walker residence they learn that this Sue, however, died thirteen years earlier; a conjoined twin, she had perished in an operation to separate her and her sister. Reassuring the parents that there is no danger to surviving sibling Jane, the agents move on.
 
     But so has the serial killer: more Sue Walkers are killed, #5, #6 and #7 with the murderer broadening the target area, moving further and further west. So when Ian spots a pretty weather girl on TV named Sue Walker, the fact that she’s based in Washington state no longer means she’s safe. Threatening to quit rather than see another Sue die, Ian convinces his superiors to let him head west. Stopping first to see his mom in Darien , Ian realizes why this Sue looks so familiar…and perhaps why protecting her seems so important…
 
     Flashback to thirteen years earlier, to when Ian was a teen, growing up next door to best friend Elias. They shared everything…secrets, escapades, everything -- except girls. Rich and handsome, Elias thought he was God’s gift to women and always got the girl. Bitter after his parents’ divorce, Elias is even unhappier when his mom remarries a man with a young child. Unhappy, that is, until they hire a teenage girl to be the child’s nanny. A beautiful girl named Sue. Elias sets his sights on her, warning the also-smitten Ian to stay away. Elias has to get his way, as usual. Neither knows that Sue has already fallen head over heels for a mystery boy she saw at the beach – Ian. But before events can escalate, tragedy intervenes: the child and her father are killed in an auto accident and, devastated, nanny Sue leaves town.
 
     Now, thirteen years later, Ian is sure this is the same Sue. But he keeps his heart in check: it’s in his role as FBI agent that he is seeking her out, not as lovesick teen grown up.
 
     Elias, heir to his father’s fortune, has also recognized Sue on tv. With no scruples to stop him and plenty of money at his disposal, he has a dossier compiled on every aspect of her private life and then contrives to meet her, starting up a relationship – still determined to possess her. She has no idea who he is and, though he seems attractive, she still pines for that mystery boy on the beach…
 
     Meanwhile, the serial killer draws closer, leaving a bloody #9 painted on Sue’s door as  a gruesome calling card. Ian must now save Sue from the killer and from the clutches of Elias who, it turns out, will do almost anything to keep Sue for his own -- especially when he sees the spark fly between her and Ian, his childhood rival.
 
     In a dangerous race against time, Ian sets a trap to catch the killer; but when it goes awry, Sue’s life is in certain jeopardy. They’ve arrested the wrong guy. Can Ian get to Sue before it’s too late?
 
     In the tradition of films such as “Kiss the Girls” and “ Sea of Love ”, this story delivers twist after turn, taking us on a rollercoaster ride of suspense.  “Sue 9” is an exciting thriller seasoned with a “steamy” side of romance, guaranteeing it to have wide appeal to a broad audience. As Ian perseveres, he cleverly unmasks the killer – it is poor mentally unbalanced Jane Walker, the surviving conjoined twin who, so racked with guilt over her sister’s death, believes she’s still alive and coming to get her; only killing every “Sue Walker” can save her. Now that she’s been found and arrested, it’s Sue 9 will be safe, and free to marry that “boy from the beach”…
 
    
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
What follows is the author’s synopsis of the manuscript…. As you can see the author is too close to the material.
 
      Once there were two best friends who lived in Darien , CT. They did everything together. Shared everything—except when it came to girls. When it came to girls, push came to shove and it meant every man (boy) for himself. When Ian Hamlin and Elias Webber were seventeen, things got ugly.
        Elias’s parents’ recent divorce was very hard on the young man and what was even more difficult, was when his mother remarried a man with a small child. When a very pretty nanny (Sue) moved into Elias’s house to care for his new step-sister, he made it very clear to Ian that he wasn’t invited anywhere near the pretty girl. Elias made sure that Ian knew his intentions. The first night Ian saw her, naked and uninhibited, through his bedroom window, he heard his friend loud and clear. “Someday she will be mine,” Elias hissed. “She will be mine.” 
       The nanny was only there for seven days when Elias’s stepsister, Tanya, and stepfather, Dick, were killed in a car accident.
       Crushed by her sudden loss, the nanny left without a word to anyone, but she was forever ingrained in the memory of those two best friends.
Thirteen years later:
      The nanny:  Sue Wallokowski (On air, she has given herself the last name.. Walker ) is now 32 years old. She lives in Vancouver , WA with her best friend, the bold and brassy -- Anita. Sue just got her first on-air job as Vancouver ’s first weathergirl and her life seemed to be on track…but she’s still searching for Mr. Right. Sue hadn’t been interested in dating in the past, because she’s still hung up on a boy she once saw on a Connecticut beach, many years ago -- A boy with deep blue eyes, jet-black hair and a disheartening scowl. (Young Ian Hamlin) In her mind, no one’s ever been able to replace that boy she saw on that beach. It was love at first sight, even though they hadn’t exchanged any words.
      Agent Ian Hamlin, now 30 years old, has just been handed a murder file that he’d hoped he’d never have to re-open. This was the third Sue Walker in as many years that had been brutally murdered in Connecticut . The killer leaving no clues behind. Ian had only been with the New Haven bureau for two years, but he knew this woman well. She was his first assignment, back when he first transferred from Seattle , WA after his wife had left him brokenhearted.  His assignment had been to keep Sue safe because someone had a grudge against women named Sue Walker in southern Connecticut . The powers that be pulled the funding after a few months and, now two years later, Sue was dead. A feeling of guilt falls upon his shoulders, making his burden that much harder to bear. His life hadn’t been going well. His wife had left him, and now, he’d let Sue down in the worst way. His superior tells him not to do anything about the new murder yet, but Ian feels that it would be best to inform the other Sue Walkers in Connecticut about the imminent danger. He and his partner, Will Harrison, end up at the Walker residence where they ask Ruth and Gordon Walker if they could speak to their daughter. Ruth breaks down into sobs and Gordon informs them that Sue had died thirteen years prior when the two girls had been separated. They were conjoined twins and Sue had died in the operation. Gordon then asked them if it had anything to do with Jane. Ian tells them he’s sorry about the mistake and that he didn’t know Jane. He just needed to speak to Sue. When they leave, Ruth sobs again and Gordon comforts his wife, telling her that it didn’t happen again, that’s it’s fine and that they will find Jane. In his head he said a prayer to God, hoping it was true.
         Elias Webber, now 30 yrs old also, is CEO of his father’s billion-dollar company, Webber Software. He has long golden hair, and a perfect body. Delusional in thinking he’s God’s gift to women. He’s even taken women away from their husbands in the past. He lives in a penthouse overlooking Puget Sound in Seattle and has another home in Sequim, on the Olympic Peninsula, where he rarely goes because of his overbearing father who has him right where he wants him -- under his thumb. One night, while making love to his live-in girlfriend, Elias catches a glimpse of the television and tosses the blonde, Sara, off his lap, grabbing for the remote and astonished that he was looking at Sue-the nanny. So many times, he’d fantasized about being with her and after thirteen years, he might get his chance. After all, whatever Elias Webber wants, Elias Webber gets. His father had instilled that in him at a very early age. “If you want something, it can be yours, son. You just have to have the balls to make it happen.” That’s what Donald Webber had repeatedly said to Elias since he was ten years old and now Elias is thinking of how he can get Sue and make her -- his own.
         In the following weeks of Sue’s weather broadcasts, Agent Ian Hamlin of the FBI is on the trail of a serial killer who has claimed the lives of, now, 5 Sue Walkers. So far, the killer has remained east of the Mississippi , but after Ian sees a pretty weathergirl on TV from his hotel room in Memphis , and her name just happens to be Sue Walker, his fear is that the killer would venture even farther west.  The pretty woman looks familiar to Ian, but he can’t quite put his finger on where he’s seen her before.
        After Sue # 7 is found in Whitefish MT, Ian takes on his superiors, threatens to quit when he can’t get his way and finally heads west to keep Sue- the weathergirl safe. But before, he heads west, he goes home to New Haven to pack and heads south for a quick visit with his mother – it’s not until he looks at the house next door and remembers Sue the nanny that he realizes she’s the weathergirl. A familiar feeling of want and also sorrow, encompass him fully. How he’d longed to walk up to her that day on the beach all those years ago. To tell her how sorry he was that the little girl that she loved so much had died. How much he’d wanted to hug her and kiss her and do so many things to her, but all he could do was just stand there and stare at her like the tongue-tied teenager that he was. Remembering how he felt losing Sue -3, Ian is even more focused on keeping this Sue from becoming another statistic. Against all odds, he heads to Vancouver to find her.
         Meanwhile, Elias gets what he wanted. He paid a pretty penny for what he needed. A complete file with every detail of Sue’s life inside. Photos of her and her best friend; her life wrapped up in one complete dossier. He takes it upon himself to make his move. His first night was unsuccessful, after attempting to pick Sue up in the bar that her best friend works at. His second attempt, a chance meeting at a hotel in Seattle , gets him what he wants…a date with Sue on a river beach near Vancouver , WA .
        While Ian Hamlin was investigating murders back east and trying to make sense of a killer who doesn’t play by the conventional rules, Elias and Sue begin a romantic affair. Sue, still unsure about a future with a man who, on paper, was as perfect as it got, liked Elias for his warm hugs and companionship, but thoughts of her mystery boy were keeping her out of Elias’s bed. Strange things had been happening to Sue during her time with Elias. She felt as if someone had been watching her. Strange phone calls began to get more persistent and even her roommate, Anita, was feeling the angst.
        Anita and her boyfriend, Ryan, split up after news of his infidelity. A day or two later, Anita is surprised by a positive pregnancy test and Sue is tickled pink…and a little green with envy. Anita’s pregnancy and Sue’s desire to have babies of her own keep Sue interested in a possible relationship with a man she doesn’t love. They are the best of friends, but Anita is pushing Sue into a more serious relationship with Elias because the man just seemed to be perfect. Too perfect, Sue thought.
       One night, while Sue is on air, a bloody nine is painted on the door of their home. Anita and her estranged boyfriend are taken downtown to the police station and that’s where Sue ends up after a couple officers came to tell her of the horror. Sue comes to realize that being on the air, even in a small town, is more than she bargained for. Her privacy has been violated and, more importantly, her home had been marred by an apparent psycho.
       When Ian arrives in Vancouver that night. He sees for himself that the threat on Sue is real. After seeing the bloody nine on her door, he’s even more convinced that he’s in the right place at the right time. He ends up at the police station where he sees her again, in the flesh and his heart swells, as he reins in his adrenaline and fear that he’d lose her before he’d be able to walk up and say, “Hi.”
       Sue sees Ian walk through the door of the police station. She grabs Anita’s hand, gasping, “It’s him. It’s really him.”
      Anita convinces her that her mind is playing tricks on her and that she has a perfect man in Elias and she should, once and for all, stop thinking about her obsession with the boy from the beach.
      Anita is willing to take Ryan back to the night, but is still keeping the secret of his baby in her womb. In the morning it goes to hell again, so Anita goes home to Sue with a plan to get him back once and for all.
       Sue and Elias’s romance heats up after that night. Although, Sue is still seeing the boy from the beach, everywhere! She even runs into Ian on the beach in Sequim, making her more than sure that fate was intervening and telling her that it’s wrong for her to be with Elias, but she’s still torn. Sue and Elias spend a romantic weekend away at his house in Sequim and that’s where Sue learns, and then suddenly remembers, that Elias is the boy she once lived with when Tanya had died. At first she’s outraged that he’d never told her the truth, but when the silver-tongued Elias convinces her it was for her own good, she falls into his arms, in tears, sorrowful about little Tanya, the girl she once thought of as her own daughter.
       Elias lies his way out of a sticky situation and finally gets to take Sue to bed. He’s gotten what he wants, but suddenly, it’s not enough. He wants more. He wants Sue forever, so after that weekend, he tosses his girlfriend, Sara, out of his penthouse and concentrates fully on keeping Sue all for himself.
      The strange happenings are occurring more frequently for Sue. More phone calls from a creepy man with a high-whiney voice, telling her she’s puurrrty.  Dead roses arrive with a card marred with a red nine. And when she returns home from her weekend away, a phone call from an irate female threatening death puts Sue over the edge…that and the fact that her mystery boy seems to be everywhere she is. Following her to the store, spying on her at the beauty salon. Everywhere she goes, she sees Ian. She somewhat wonders if he’s the one who’s been stalking her and making her skin crawl. Her skin was crawling all right, but not in a bad way. She’s more aroused by his presence than annoyed like she should have been.
       Agent Will Harrison is introduced and welcomed to Vancouver by Ian who has a special assignment for his long time (Married) partner. He is to ingratiate himself in Sue or Anita’s life as to be closer to the woman; grant access to their home and get inside information that the FBI needs to keep her safe. He needs to get inside, plant listening devices and somehow make these women trust his every move. On the presence of being a single cable guy, he does a good job and is invited by Anita to be her pawn to get the father of her unborn baby back. He spends nights on the couch, has popcorn with Anita, watches movies and is becoming a comforting fixture around the house for Sue, who is more frightened than ever about the strange events surrounding her life.
        The night that Anita’s boyfriend (Ryan) decides he wants her back, is when all hell breaks loose. Ryan breaks into the house late at night and is caught by Ian and Will and cuffed before Sue and Anita make it out of bed.
      Anita is furious and Sue is in awe, walking toward Ian with her eyes wide open. “It’s you!”
         Ian and Will are forced to show their ID and make up a lame story as to why they are following Sue. Sue somewhat believes them when they tell her that a stalker has targeted her and she agrees to cooperate. Thrilled to tears that her mystery boy is back and he’s not a bad-guy after all, Sue re-thinks her relationship with Elias.
        A bloody nine ends up on her parking spot at work, igniting drama all around her. Anita moves out and into Ryan’s house, leaving Sue alone in a house with an FBI agent sleeping on her couch. But if it were up to Sue, it would Ian on her couch, not Will.
      Her attraction to Ian hits an all time high, as does his attraction to her, but he’s a tough cop with only one thing on his mind…keeping her safe. He knows a steady man is in her life, he just doesn’t know who it is yet.
      Elias shows up at the television studio one night to take Sue home and that is when Ian and Elias see each other for the first time in years. Ian is the first to throw a punch and Sue is taken aback by his aggressive nature toward her boyfriend. After a heated exchange, Ian realizes more than ever that he will never be with Sue. It was just that much more painful for him to be around her.
      Elias fears that Ian will say too much and warns Sue that Ian is a lunatic who can’t be trusted. Her curiosity is piqued.
      In the weeks to come, Sue needs a ride up to Seattle to stay with Elias for the weekend. On the trip up, Ian is still standoffish and won’t open up about his bitter rivalry with his former best friend, but Sue does get him to admit that he remembered her from that week that she lived with Elias. They have a long talk and really get to know each other on the way to Seattle , where Ian has to relinquish control and let Sue out of his car, so she can spend the weekend with her lover – the man who had made Ian’s life miserable.
       That weekend, Sue gets Elias to open up about why Ian and him are no longer friends, but Ian will still have nothing to do with her questions. Ian’s mood is even more soured since he learned of Elias Webber being the man who takes Sue to bed. He could deal with any other man in her bed, but it was killing him that it is Elias.
         Elias is still afraid of what Ian might be saying to Sue, so he suddenly proposes marriage during that weekend away. Sue is saddened that she has no love to give to Elias, yet she still likes the way he hugs. She makes love to him a number of times, but her mind is constantly on Ian. In fact, she closes her eyes whenever Elias touches her – wanting so badly for it to be Ian’s hands on her body rather than Elias’s. Unsure of her feelings, she says nothing to his proposal. They have lunch with his mother, who informs Sue that Tanya and Dick’s accident all those years ago, wasn’t an accident at all. Someone had cut her husband’s brake-line…they had been murdered and the police had never found the culprit.
      Sue is sickened by that news and is more persistent in getting her answers from Elias. She gets him to admit that Ian had trashed his car after high-school graduation and that’s why they weren’t friends anymore. He told her that Ian was jealous and had taken his anger out on Elias’s new BMW – end of story. Sue has a hard time believing Elias and can’t wait to return to Vancouver to see Ian.
       When Sue returns back to Vancouver, Ian is waiting on her couch with news that Agent Harrison had to return to Connecticut because of a family emergency and that he’d be the one living on her couch. She feigned anger and resentment for the sake of Elias, but inside, she was jumping for joy. Ian demands that to make the sting work, Elias must stay out of the picture for the time being. Elias was furious and began treating Sue like a piece of property rather than his possibly fiancé. His goodbye kiss seemed possessive, sending a shiver down Sue’s spine when he walked out the door.
     Sue still hadn’t given him an answer, but she was wearing his ring.
     Ian immediately saw the ring and was enraged, saddened and jealous once again that Elias Webber always got what he wanted.
       That night, Sue finally confronts Ian and their amazing heated kiss, that gets a little out of control, tells her what she wants to know. He feels the same way she does, he’s just stubborn and hurting from his past. Their time together is amazing, even though a strange killer is still making desperate attempts to scare her and make his presence known.
      A week passes in which Ian and Sue grow closer. They play games, make dinner for each other and watch movies late into the night. Love blossoms, but it’s strictly hands off for Ian who insists that ‘this is how it has to be.’ For Sue distracts him from his job. He loves her more than anything and is still saddened by her relationship with Elias.
      One night after work, Sue is followed home. Ian wants to bait the culprit and convinces Sue to go outside and call the cat. She does, but with Ian on the other side of the door with gun drawn. Nothing happens, other than a masturbating weirdo watching her from his car. The agents follow the man and lose him in an old apartment building later that night – (not wanting to scare him off, if he was indeed the killer.)
        When it’s all over and it’s time for bed, Ian confesses that he knows she’s sneaking out and sleeping with him on the couch. They spend the night together in her room, but on opposite ends of her bed.
       A sting is set up and an undercover agent, who looks a lot like Sue, is brought in to help the FBI make Sue look vulnerable at times. Ian leaves his place in the house and Sue is saddened by his departure.
       When Ian and Sue see each other again on the lakeshore , Sue makes her feelings known and asks Ian if he remembers her that day on the Connecticut beach too. It gets emotional when Ian confides in her about his feelings for her. They kiss again (intensely and passionately) and this time, Elias sees it all.
      That afternoon, Sue is driving home from a fundraiser when her brakes fail and she crashes into a large truck at the bottom of the hill. Ian meets her at the hospital with a scowl and a very bad feeling in his gut when Sue starts asking questions about Elias’s past. She has suspicions that her accident was no ‘accident’ and when Ian leaves her alone in the morning, she leaves the hospital in search of answers.
       She takes the train to Seattle , and enters Elias’s penthouse where she finds the private investigation report on herself. Sickened and feeling as if she’d made a terrible mistake, she berates herself for getting close to a man who was as sick as Elias was. A man she thought she knew.
     Ian calls her cell phone and learns that she’s in Seattle . He warns her that they found a long blonde hair in her undercarriage and he asks her if she’s anywhere near Elias. (Elias has long blonde locks)
     She says no, because she thinks Elias is in Chicago . When she hangs up with Ian, she makes her way into the bathroom and grabs a handful of hair from one of Elias’s brushes and puts it into a baggie. Then her phone rings again, this time it’s Elias, warning her that she shouldn’t listen to Ian. That Ian lies and that he loves her and they were meant to be together forever.  Sue asks him if he was responsible for his stepfather and stepsister’s death and all he can say is, “Is that what Ian told you?”
     She screams at him, tells him that it’s over. That she can’t marry him and she’ll send him the ring. He screams back that he loves her and asks why isn’t he good enough for her. She hangs up, feeling emotionally spent and wanting so badly to be in Ian’s arms.
       Things heat up when she returns to Vancouver . Ian is waiting at the train station with murder in his eyes. He puts her in his SUV with a scowl that would make a baby cry. On the way home he pulls over ready to let her have it for running away and endangering herself, but instead finds himself kissing her madly, hugging her and loving her in a way he shouldn’t, for in his mind, she still belongs to Elias and as much as he hates the guy, he wasn’t thrilled about wanting another man’s woman in that way.
     Outraged by the sting of rejection, Sue follows him back to his hotel room, where she tells him that she ended it with Elias and told him that she wants him and then they finally make love. Many times -- then right before she gets tucked into a cab, she hands Ian the baggie full of hair and simply asks him to see if it matches what they found under her car.
      A couple of days later, Ian confronts Sue and asks her where she got the hair. It matched, but it wasn’t from a man. They both silently conclude that is was Elias’s ex-girlfriend and Ian gets on the phone, calling it in to the Seattle PD and rattling off Sara’s stats like he knew them by heart and that’s when Sue learns that Sara is Ian’s ex-wife. (duh, duh, duh) Elias had seduced after their ten year high school reunion and Ian couldn’t tell Sue that because he thought she would have thought that he was just out for revenge…when in truth, he’s loved Sue since the first day he saw her. 
     Elias shows up, witnessing once again, Sue in Ian’s arms. They all clear the air, have it out about the past. How Elias had seduced Ian’s high school sweetheart and screwed her in his BMW before graduation…and that is why Ian had trashed his car. And then Elias apologized for taking Ian’s wife and he admitted that he was so jealous of Ian when they were kids…jealous about his family and what a great dad Ian had…and Elias learns the awful truth about his father. Elias’s father, they all conclude, was the one responsible for Dick and Tanya’s death, because he wanted his family back and yet, Elias’s mother had remarried. Elias is outraged and truly remorseful for his past sins against Ian and finally sees the ugly truth that he’s turning into his old man, a man he loathes more than anyone.
     Ian cries when Elias leaves and is consoled by Sue, who accepts him for his good, his bad and his scowl.  Moments later, he leaves her in the care of the Portland agents so he can file a full report on his lunatic ex-wife.
      After the late report, Sue is on cloud nine and forgets her escort when she gets on the elevator that leads to the parking garage. She’s too busy glowing in her new love for a man who fate had brought back to her at the perfect time. The elevator gets stuck between floors and when two hairy hands emerge to help her, she couldn’t be happier, that is until the man speaks and she recognizes his high-whiney voice, when he says, “You’re so puuurrtty.” The man in a janitor’s suit with big bulging eyes and a bulbous bald head emerges on Sue as she lets out a blood curdling scream.
      She’s taken captive to a men’s bathroom while Ian is being called back to the station by her bodyguards who blew their assignment. Her hands are tied behind her back, she’s terrified and can only imagine what this sick man is going to do to her.
      Ian finds Sue minutes later in the men’s room, with a man holding a wad of her cut-off hair in his hand that is wrapped around his naked, engorged penis -- a pair of scissors in the other hand, while Sue is unconscious on the floor at his feet. Emotionally overwrought and tired of this menace to society, Ian shoots the man without warning.
        The man survives, Ian was careful about where he aimed, but he would have liked to have killed the man who had harmed Sue. She was fine, just a bit shook up. Everyone assumes it’s over. The undercover female agent bids Sue a fond adieu. Ian takes Sue back to his hotel for some hot lovemaking and in the morning, she goes home to her house, alone and unprotected.
      While Ian is wrapping things up at the Portland office and waiting for the suspect to get out of surgery, the pieces start falling out of place for the investigators. Nothing is adding up and when they realize they have the stalker in custody, but not the serial killer, Ian fears the worse when he can’t get Sue on the phone. After a call to his superior on New Haven to tell him that it’s not over, he races to her house, breaks open the door, and finds her naked in the bathroom with the stereo blaring. He takes her hard against the wall, weeping against her naked body as he makes love to her in a loving yet possessive manner. Sue has never felt so much passion.  Then he tells her that he’s never going to let her out of his sight for the rest of his life. He tells her that it’s not over and then gets back to work on finding the serial killer.
        He and Elias get a chance to talk again when Sara is found and brought up on charges for her attempt on Sue’s life. Ian gets a chance to forgive his ex-wife and he feels good with the fact that he and Elias might be able to put the past behind them…someday.
       A few weeks later, Ian and Sue head back to Connecticut to visit his parents and check out a lead they have found about the first of the Sue murders. Ian spends the day interviewing a nurse from the first murder investigation and is pointed in the direction of the Walker home where he and Will had been months ago. (The conjoined twins’ home)
      When they arrive, both Gordon and Ruth Walker are ashen and afraid to speak freely, igniting a bad gut feeling inside of Ian. The FBI agents finally get to the truth and find out the Jane Walker is responsible for all the murders and is still nowhere to be found. Her father finally owns up to his knowledge of the first murder, but pleads with Ian and Will for their sympathy in that Jane is all they have left and they had no idea she was out there hurting others. That it was her schizophrenia that was making her insane. Ruth was distraught and felt her husband was betraying Jane with his confession. He agreed to help in anyway he could, but Ruth had to leave the room in tears. For it wasn’t her daughter’s fault, it was her sickness and her paranoia that was making her do such awful things. Ruth and Gordon knew that her sister’s (Sue’s) death had been especially hard on Jane and Jane’s fear that Sue was coming to get her may have lead to the murder of the first nurse at her mental hospital. Jane feared that Sue was still alive and out for revenge because Jane had the dominant organs when they were younger and joined at the hip. It was Jane’s illness; Ruth tried to tell them, over and over again.
       Another name was added to the FBI’s most wanted. A tap was placed on their phone. They had Jane’s bank and Visa information as well as any contacts she may have had and Ian felt a bit relieved that they at least knew who they were now looking for.
       Ian had requested his transfer to the Portland Oregon office so that he can keep an eye on Sue. They had already been living together, but Ian hadn’t made his full intentions known to her.  The best part was that Sue finally got to see Ian’s parents again after all these years. They welcomed her with open arms – Ian’s mom mentioning that forgiveness looked good on him…he actually looked happy by Sue’s side. He even mentioned that they were going to see Elias up at Cape Cod in a day or two. He felt good again, about his life, his new love and his new career in Portland , Oregon .
       Ian proposed marriage and then showed Sue where he used to watch her from. She agrees to be his wife and he’s the happiest man alive.
       Four and a half months later, Sue is on her way to see Anita’s new baby. Anita and Ryan had married and had a baby boy. The FBI was still watching Sue, but she had no idea of the fact. She lived with Ian and he was still as overprotective as they came, but she was used to his insanity and was happily planning for their spring wedding.
        When she leaves the hospital after spending time with Anita and her baby, she calls Ian to tell him she’s coming home and they joke about making babies, or at least trying.   Then she feels a painful sting to her lower back and falls to the asphalt in the dark parking lot.
         Ian, who was nearby in a surveillance van, jumps out; telling Jane “It’s over.” Arrests Jane Walker for murdering 8 women and feels as if a huge weight is lifted off his chest.
        Sue is fine, just a couple broken fingernails and is ready for some eternal bliss when she cries and suggests to Ian that she’s ready to make a baby.            
 
                 

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